Comments on: The 13th Floor - DBA Lehane http://fs.shamuswrites.com/2006/08/20/the-13th-floor-dba-lehane/ Speculative Flash Fiction Sat, 22 Nov 2008 03:37:43 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.5.1 By: Amin http://fs.shamuswrites.com/2006/08/20/the-13th-floor-dba-lehane/#comment-144 Amin Mon, 28 Aug 2006 08:18:28 +0000 http://open-dialogue.com/fs/2006/08/20/the-13th-floor-dba-lehane/#comment-144 Killer story. Literally. Such a great and economical description of a life never realising its potential. Killer story. Literally.

Such a great and economical description of a life never realising its potential.

]]> By: Billy Cea http://fs.shamuswrites.com/2006/08/20/the-13th-floor-dba-lehane/#comment-122 Billy Cea Tue, 22 Aug 2006 07:40:26 +0000 http://open-dialogue.com/fs/2006/08/20/the-13th-floor-dba-lehane/#comment-122 This is your brain, this is your brain on drugs. Really great setup, you could have gone a thousand different ways with the ending, the one you chose wasn't too bad though I was hoping for a more Hunter S Thompsonesque kind of ending. This is your brain, this is your brain on drugs.

Really great setup, you could have gone a thousand different ways with the ending, the one you chose wasn’t too bad though I was hoping for a more Hunter S Thompsonesque kind of ending.

]]> By: Brandon http://fs.shamuswrites.com/2006/08/20/the-13th-floor-dba-lehane/#comment-121 Brandon Tue, 22 Aug 2006 01:36:35 +0000 http://open-dialogue.com/fs/2006/08/20/the-13th-floor-dba-lehane/#comment-121 This was by far the sickest of the one's I've read, but that is, as said above, what makes it so powerful to imagine. This was by far the sickest of the one’s I’ve read, but that is, as said above, what makes it so powerful to imagine.

]]> By: the Wandering Author http://fs.shamuswrites.com/2006/08/20/the-13th-floor-dba-lehane/#comment-120 the Wandering Author Mon, 21 Aug 2006 19:27:01 +0000 http://open-dialogue.com/fs/2006/08/20/the-13th-floor-dba-lehane/#comment-120 Another great one! I've never really been tempted to do drugs anyway; too afraid of what they'd do to my mind. But I have to say that story is a pretty good one for scaring off anyone who was tempted... Painful, terrifying, and an amazingly good portrait of how addicts ruin their own lives, and cooperate with others seeking to ruin them as well. Another great one! I’ve never really been tempted to do drugs anyway; too afraid of what they’d do to my mind. But I have to say that story is a pretty good one for scaring off anyone who was tempted…

Painful, terrifying, and an amazingly good portrait of how addicts ruin their own lives, and cooperate with others seeking to ruin them as well.

]]> By: hana http://fs.shamuswrites.com/2006/08/20/the-13th-floor-dba-lehane/#comment-119 hana Mon, 21 Aug 2006 18:18:18 +0000 http://open-dialogue.com/fs/2006/08/20/the-13th-floor-dba-lehane/#comment-119 Brutal, just brutal. Loved it. Brutal, just brutal. Loved it.

]]> By: Prashanth http://fs.shamuswrites.com/2006/08/20/the-13th-floor-dba-lehane/#comment-117 Prashanth Mon, 21 Aug 2006 12:05:22 +0000 http://open-dialogue.com/fs/2006/08/20/the-13th-floor-dba-lehane/#comment-117 Graphic, fiery and ruthless. You create a convincing vignette of a weak mind, prowled upon. Ms. Susan has a point too. :) Well done. Graphic, fiery and ruthless. You create a convincing vignette of a weak mind, prowled upon.

Ms. Susan has a point too. :) Well done.

]]> By: Susan Abraham http://fs.shamuswrites.com/2006/08/20/the-13th-floor-dba-lehane/#comment-115 Susan Abraham Mon, 21 Aug 2006 11:36:34 +0000 http://open-dialogue.com/fs/2006/08/20/the-13th-floor-dba-lehane/#comment-115 Very painful story to read, Lehane. Found it especially difficult togo on when it came to the 'mother'. But in that pain and upsetting violence, was where the heartbeat of your story ticked and held its marvellous power. I kept thinking as I read it all, what an excellent screenplay this would make. Heart-stopping images throughout. Very painful story to read, Lehane.
Found it especially difficult togo on when it came to the ‘mother’.
But in that pain and upsetting violence, was where the heartbeat of your story ticked and held its marvellous power.
I kept thinking as I read it all, what an excellent screenplay this would make.
Heart-stopping images throughout.

]]> By: Stephanie Vann http://fs.shamuswrites.com/2006/08/20/the-13th-floor-dba-lehane/#comment-113 Stephanie Vann Mon, 21 Aug 2006 09:59:18 +0000 http://open-dialogue.com/fs/2006/08/20/the-13th-floor-dba-lehane/#comment-113 Great twist. Great twist.

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